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The Day The Angels Cried by ~xXBrokenBeautyXx:iconxXBrokenBeautyXx:



i wipe these tears,
off my eyeliner streaked face,
i feel his arms around me all over again,
crushed by this imaginary embrace.

I sit here numbed by the pain,
nowhere to run to,
no one to blame,
no clue what to do.

I listen to the same sad song,
over and over again,
crying so hard,
where did the pain begin?

Thinking first of my aunt,
the day she died,
eyes all out of tears,
the day the angels cried.

I think of my best friend,
why cant she be here?,
glance at the cuts on my wrists,
so much pain, so much fear.

It cuts deeper into me,
just like his phone call,
my ex fucking some dumb girl,
i used to have it all.

So much pain inside of me,
so unsure of who to tell,
wishing i'd never met him,
wish my life wasn't such hell.

So much has happened,
I can't believe she died,
so many hearts have been broken,
the day the angels cried.

I sit here in silence,
lips trembling in pain,
keep trying to erase,
these thoughts from my brain.

I cut myself deeper,
layed down im my bed,
wonder if the angels will cry,
when i'm finally dead.

The next day i was gone,
No one seemed to care,
no one shed a tear,
No one wished they woulda been there.

But little did i know,
what no one could see,
a tear running down an angles fragile face,
a single tear for me.
©2004-2010 ~xXBrokenBeautyXx
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Author's Comments

i'm so depressed... so i decided to write a bit

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:iconbr0kenr0ses:
Good job, I applaud you. The poem to me seemed a little more like a song. You have alot of talent my friend...good job.

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:icongarteh:
Jenna, you write some of the best poetry I have ever read. You're the most amazing person ever to me :-D. Take care of yourself and don't let other people get you down. Take care. <3 u jenna :)
:iconzedman:
Jenna, this is a beautiful poem. It flows wonderfully and I love your mention of "the day the angels cried". You did an excellent job on this, and I hope writing it helped ease some of the pain you were experiencing. Excellent job on this.

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:iconbleeding-wickedly:
"wonder if the angels will cry,
when i'm finally dead."

I learnt that through death many people will cry even some you never really knew and it can really affect people, a girl, who I never really knew, in the year above me in school died last year of meningitus her death affected me so so badly I still go and see her grave regularly and I don't even really know why. I guess my point to this is never think that no one would be sad or no one would miss you because even people you don't know end up missing having you around.

I adore this poem its beautifully written, you are a very talented writer
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sorry for talking quite so much crap
xxxx

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:iconawkwardlovely:
hm. I haven't cried in a funeral before, so I wouldn't know what's it's like. But I love the idea of "the day the angels cried"

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:iconkutieangel:
So much emotion :( Sorry about everything though. Nice poem, well written.

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:iconeli61087:
Nicely done, a good emotional writer. You kept me glued and well don't over use profanity as shock words. Keep them as your last resort. From this I can see that your pretty good writer. I must go look at more.

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:iconarazio:
Wow, exremely emotive!

Very sad poem... excellently written though :clap:

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:iconversesolochorus:
eyes all out of tears,
the day the angels cried.

my ex fucking some dumb girl,


Those two lines kind of killed it for me. This work would be decent if you could replace those with something else. This poem set this really low vibe in the reader's mind, it's best kept consistent.

Nice work.

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